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The
Art Of Rewriting
Putting Rewriting Samples Together
Here’s what you do to put together some samples. Take paragraphs from 5
different articles off the Internet. Try and see that they are all on
different topics. Then title them all ‘Original’. Now below each,
rewrite them keeping in mind the 10 steps from the Guide to Rewriting.
Title each of these ‘Rewrite’. Try and use a slightly different style in
each one. Go through it with a fine toothcomb and a spellchecker for any
mistakes.
It’s easy for the client if the paragraphs are short and it is all in
one file – preferably a Word document. Remember that he might have to
look through a great many samples so make sure yours is short and sweet.
Attach this whenever you are applying for a project.
Samples
Sample 1
(original)
Are You Ready For Change In Your Life?
When you are willing to set goals, your motivation becomes more focused
and less confused in everyday interactions. Setting goals and designing
your dreams and aspirations is a commitment to participate in a dynamic
relationship and interaction between yourself and others. Committing
yourself to be in a relationship with others helps to create an
environment of self-support. The "willingness" to define your goals and
aspirations provide you with the motivation to focus on achieving your
goals.
(rewrite)
Taking Conscious Control Of Change
Change, as they say, is the only constant. The challenge is how you
manage it. Do you take control of it or do you let it control you? The
latter route would mean a kind of meandering, a giving in to
circumstances or situations without asserting your will. It might at
first glance seem the easy course to take but very soon you’ll find it
leads nowhere. The road to success is marked with the goals you plant
along the way and the course you take to make sure you achieve them.
Sample 2
(original)
What do we mean by the term ‘wellness’? It’s really a state of mind. No
matter what physical conditions you have to suffer – ageing, accidents,
disease – what really matters is the way you deal with it. And this is
what makes the difference. It’s the way you take things in your stride
and try and make the best of it, try and focus on the silver lining and
smile rather than on the dark storm clouds. Being well is more a mental
condition than a physical one finally. So that’s the space you need to
get to if you want to be in a state of ‘wellness’.
(rewrite)
Wellness is a state of being that’s found mainly between the ears. True,
the body can be affected by so many physical onslaughts – accidents,
disease, ageing, but how we deal with them is what is important. It’s
what determines whether we feel better or not. Why only ‘feel better’?
That’s because you may not actually get better but there’s nothing to
stop you from feeling better. Take ageing, for example. You might slow
it down but you can’t stop it. You can however, choose to accept it
physically and still think and feel young. That’s really what ‘wellness’
is all about. It’s about being well up there.
Sample 3
(original)
To know how carbohydrates affect us we must understand the concept of
“glycemic index”. Sugar from a particular food that enters brain cells
and other cells of the body is the "glycemic index" of a particular
food. We need foods with a low glycemic index, so that the pancreas does
not secrete too much of insulin. Even children need carbohydrates with a
low glycemic index. It is seen children who eat foods with a low
glycemic index are better behaved and have better academic performance
in school.
Some of the best carbohydrates are –
• Fruits grapefruit, apples, cherries, oranges, and grapes
• Oatmeal and bran
• Legumes, such as soybeans, kidney beans, chickpeas, and lentils
If you want to eat that occasional sugar loaded treats, eat it along
with these good carbs, because it will take a longer time to process.
(rewrite)
All foods have what is called a ‘glycemic index’ and if we need to stay
healthy and not tax our pancreas too much, we need to eat foods that
have a low glycemic index. Take fruits, bran, oatmeal and legumes – they
all contain carbohydrates but they are the good carbohydrates which are
necessary for the functioning of many organs in our body, especially the
brain. When children have these foods instead of the very sugary foods
and drinks, one sees a vast improvement in their performance in schools
as they study better and behave better. If they do insist sometimes on
very sweet foods, make sure to give it to them along with some of the
good carbohydrate foods so that it lengthens the processing time.
The sugars that are a result of low glycemic index foods energize and
invigorate the brain cells and are great for children and adults alike.
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